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Post by dizzyjam on Dec 31, 2009 22:36:55 GMT -5
**heh-heh-heh** (Good one Teskas!)
To his right a door
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Post by Teskas on Jan 1, 2010 19:42:25 GMT -5
**thanks**
which he shoulder-charged.
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Post by Grace Bridges on Jan 1, 2010 22:50:02 GMT -5
It crunched open to reveal
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Post by dizzyjam on Jan 2, 2010 0:46:47 GMT -5
Ugh! I can't stand the way that sentence structure looks:
"To his right a door which he shoulder-charged. It crunched open to reveal"
A fragment for a sentence? No, can't accept that. I'll incorporate what Grace said into the previous sentence and keep it open for future people. I'm not putting anything down this time other than this post. Here's the full correction from all three posts:
To his right a door - which he shoulder-charged - crunched open to reveal
**Oh, and you're welcome, Teskas**
okay, continue.....
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Post by jfranklin on Jan 4, 2010 5:29:53 GMT -5
a room of dark shadows
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Post by Teskas on Jan 4, 2010 6:31:16 GMT -5
in which the sword glinted.
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Post by dizzyjam on Jan 5, 2010 21:40:44 GMT -5
He entered and the demon
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Post by jfranklin on Jan 6, 2010 6:41:22 GMT -5
shrieked blasphemous profanities as it
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Post by Teskas on Jan 6, 2010 14:02:14 GMT -5
guessed its doom. Brian wheeled
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Post by dizzyjam on Jan 12, 2010 21:15:02 GMT -5
***ryain, how does that continue what was written before? "Brian wheeled that the shadows were deeper...." ?? Try again, or someone else step in and pick up from what Teskas left off with.***
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Post by Paul Baines on Jan 13, 2010 2:13:59 GMT -5
glared with hate-drenched eyes into
**does "hate-drenched" count as one word or two?
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ryain
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Fantasy.... Fashion....
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Post by ryain on Jan 13, 2010 10:23:35 GMT -5
***ryain, how does that continue what was written before? "Brian wheeled that the shadows were deeper...." ?? Try again, or someone else step in and pick up from what Teskas left off with.*** Sorry, My computer fouled. I tried to delete it but it didn't work.
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Post by tris on Jan 13, 2010 14:57:34 GMT -5
into the abyss of memory
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ryain
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Post by ryain on Jan 14, 2010 9:56:16 GMT -5
that had become
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Post by Teskas on Jan 15, 2010 14:16:27 GMT -5
confused.
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