Wind Farm Annie - for critique or comment

[Christian Soldier]

First off: check your PM's and let me know if your interested before you post thre rest.

Next up: I may be crazy, but it looks like you shifted viewpoint characters somewhere in the middle. It starts off with Greene and sort of shifts to Farmer.

I'll give it a once over again later and see if I pick anything else up.

[JenLenaMom]

Apart from a few typos and the POV shift I really like it. Good work for a first draft.

[tonylavoie]

Thanks guys! Yeah, when I started it, I think I was in Greene's head. Somewhere down the line it became Farmer's story. I'll fix that. I also need to hint a little bit more about what the real stakes are, probably by upping Greene's fear and panic a little.

Appreciate the time and comments!

-Tony

[tonylavoie]

Just FYI...I deleted the story, so folks will be able to enjoy it more if it gets picked up by AF.

Thanks again for the feedback, guys! -T