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Post by newburydave on Aug 21, 2010 2:16:50 GMT -5
sarcasm. "You're not Brianna, Hescottleach!"
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Ahah, another evil presence is revealed.
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Post by choosybeggar on Aug 21, 2010 14:53:47 GMT -5
Hescottleach's eyes opened wide. "How ___________________________________ Hohohoho! We finally have solved the mystery! Bad guys are good, and good guys are bad! The Wyrm (I can't remember his name) is a good guy, and Brianna/Hescottleach is a bad guy/girl. So sad. ;D
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Post by dizzyjam on Aug 22, 2010 6:25:25 GMT -5
did you know?"
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Post by birdnerd on Aug 22, 2010 8:16:00 GMT -5
The Wyrm smiled. "I always
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Post by choosybeggar on Aug 22, 2010 9:09:06 GMT -5
can tell my sister's imitators!
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What brother wouldn't?
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Post by newburydave on Aug 23, 2010 9:46:24 GMT -5
What have you done with ================ Missing POV Alert!!
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Post by choosybeggar on Aug 23, 2010 16:44:44 GMT -5
her protective pink panĂ¡chelous bracelet?
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I'm sorry, newburydave. Are you talking about the POV of the main guy? Or something else? I understand his POV to be still standing, and the number of sentences between POV establishments to be within reasonable amounts. The fact that we put only a few words at a time makes it seem like a long time since we've been inside his mind. It's been only a few sentences. Please explain.
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Post by dizzyjam on Aug 23, 2010 17:20:52 GMT -5
She always wears it
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Post by choosybeggar on Aug 23, 2010 17:40:18 GMT -5
to keep her identity safe.
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Post by dizzyjam on Aug 23, 2010 21:22:00 GMT -5
" Suddenly, in walks this creature
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Post by choosybeggar on Aug 24, 2010 16:43:55 GMT -5
that said, "Have you seen
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I think you missed the tense there, dizzyjam. Everything up to this point has been in past tense. So I'm going to pretend you put yours in past tense, as well, a.k.a. '" Suddenly, in walked this creature' I hope you don't mind.
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Post by newburydave on Aug 24, 2010 19:12:53 GMT -5
a girl named Brianna, I ======================= Brianna is the missing POV. Since that other guy has been impersonating her, where is she. Is there foul play here? Is she tied up in the broom closet back in the bookstore or is this just a diversion and she's closing in on the arch galactic enemy Dr. Artmetos who is about to detonate a gravity bomb to destroy the milky way? Is the pope really catholic? Oh wait that's from another story, a little bit of dialog creep . . . (OIASE)
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Post by choosybeggar on Aug 24, 2010 19:39:22 GMT -5
need to discuss business with
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So let's see if I've got this straight. The Wyrm, who is a stinky blob right now, is a good guy. He's Brianna's brother, and just got dissed by Hescottleach. Hescottleach is an imposter, and bad guy. Someone new just came in, and wants to see Brianna, who is nowhere to be found. There's still some things to clear up, such as the fact that the Wyrm (what's his name, again?) was about to slice the main guy to pieces, and was stopped by Hescottleach/Brianna. Maybe this could be tied into his sister's disappearance. He thinks the main guy kidnapped her, maybe?
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Post by Grace Bridges on Aug 25, 2010 1:03:57 GMT -5
her on a matter of
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I'm sorry guys, I'm having real trouble following along now!
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Post by newburydave on Aug 25, 2010 8:29:37 GMT -5
tracing a megagram of antimatter.
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I believe an Mg of antimater would very neatly remove a very large portion of the created universe. In the right place it could destabalize the gravity well of a galaxy.
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